we're seeing a lot of people making the same mistake about their stories, and it's a surprisingly simple and basic mistake. which is, unfortunately, hard to fix if you're on your first or second draft.
Think - whose story am I telling? In which character's company are we going through this movie? You might already think you know the answer to that - but there's a strange and unusual blindness that afflicts screenwriters who have lived with their stories for a while, and you won't even know you have it.
try this. Write down in a paragraph or two the story AS TOLD FROM THE POINT OF VIEW OF A SECONDARY CHARACTER. as if they were narrating, or as though they are the key character. make him or her your star for a moment.
I think you'll find this throws up insights...
and remember (in life, as well as in cinema) everyone is the hero of their own story...
